20210303_10min
© 2021 Akikoma
Done as part of a 30 minute class.
My current goal is: Improve at correctly capturing the overall proportions of the human form
Nice to meet you. I'm participating from Japan. I would be very happy if you could give me a critique. I'm not very good at English, so I'm using translation software to write this text.
I may not be able to write a good reply, but if you give me a critique, I would like to refer to it.
Soysaucewhale
Hi akikoma.
First off, I can see that you have a good grasp of form. I see contour lines around the legs and arms, and your center line goes across the surface of the torso (not just a curved line). This is good. However, all this work you put into building structure is wasted as soon as you did the overlay in graphite. The shading on the legs and torso are just scribbled straight lines. Shading lines should follow the form.
Here is an example from Michael Hampton's Figure Drawing Design and Invention:
[img]https://share.icloud.com/photos/0oiA5SRm5z4D4AN8ZiKRNWYBQ#Saint_Paul_-_St._Anthony_Park[/img]https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZVtJEb7By5y7-tfasW5X45Hx93gRaSnK/view?usp=drivesdk
Notice how the lines used to shade the body are curved. The lines wrap around like rubber bands.
I hope this was helpful. I can see you have a good understanding of form, you just need to show it better! Keep up the good work.
-Sawyer
First off, I can see that you have a good grasp of form. I see contour lines around the legs and arms, and your center line goes across the surface of the torso (not just a curved line). This is good. However, all this work you put into building structure is wasted as soon as you did the overlay in graphite. The shading on the legs and torso are just scribbled straight lines. Shading lines should follow the form.
Here is an example from Michael Hampton's Figure Drawing Design and Invention:
[img]https://share.icloud.com/photos/0oiA5SRm5z4D4AN8ZiKRNWYBQ#Saint_Paul_-_St._Anthony_Park[/img]https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZVtJEb7By5y7-tfasW5X45Hx93gRaSnK/view?usp=drivesdk
Notice how the lines used to shade the body are curved. The lines wrap around like rubber bands.
I hope this was helpful. I can see you have a good understanding of form, you just need to show it better! Keep up the good work.
-Sawyer
Akikoma
Thank you so much!
The diagaram you showed is very clear!
I will use it as areference.
The diagaram you showed is very clear!
I will use it as areference.
However, here's a littler critique: As for the non-photo blue for the preliminary under-sketch, it's still functional, but it's much too hard, and I just don't, and cannot seem to get enough give to the lightest touch. Why don't you kindly please, please go thru 138 minutes of 17 second figure position studies???????????????? (138 x 60/17, 8280/17= about 487 figural attitudes, all flipped horizontally, and all rotated 3 times individually) Still in the meantime, be sure to check out this link right here: Former Disney Animation Legend and Legacy, Andreas Deja's Post on Drawing Styles
This post is here to inspire and totally and absolutely influence you on your current goal with a collection of rough and cleaner sketches.
However, the reason why you definitely could go with these approaches is because, those rough practice sketches don't have to be perfectly clean, because it can give your clearest scribble poses even too energetic, and vitaler than ever, ever before.
Good luck, and have lots of fun.