04-16-2024

Hello again Hoshi. You know, you're doing a great job on your face's edges, your perceptions of spaces, relationships, and of course, values and the gestalt, the face-ness of the face. But, this facial gesture is looking too stiff and frozen rigid. Would you like to please go ahead with making your expressions and facial features truly, truly emotional and expressive, by just going for your very first 30 minute class mode of faces and expressions, but with doing quick exercises of your own face reflected in your mirrors, so that you can and must caricature the range of expressions.

The explanation of my tiny, little suggestion is because, your understanding of faces and expressions can and will be improved on dramatically. So, for much of the info, please look into the Edward Renggli and Andrew Loomis books on drawing faces and emotions, followed by this video down here and more.

https://youtu.be/5VCiTcOYado?feature=shared



Let's hope you can and will find it helpful and useful.

First off, I am having to adapt quite a bit from critiquing analogue drawing to a digital drawing. In which I myself don't have a lot of practical experience.

The proportions of the face and the placement of the features look natural, the distribution of darkness values seems mostly convincing. I am still a bit irritated by the amount of blending you use, it feels to me like you are losing too many informations that way, and produce an uncanny flatness. Shadows have shapes, and you are almost completely sacrificing them.

There is a remarkable difference in quality between the face itself with the hairs, and the neck, which looks a bit like a stepchild and afterthought. I am aware, that the neck wasn't your first priority, but the overall length, and the way it connects to the shoulders seems unnatural.

There is a bit of an adam's apple-like shape indicated on the neck, but on the lower end it should lead to the centre of the collarbone, that is just missing, and on the upper end, it is broken by some brush stroke from correcting the chin.